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Easy Street - [DE2020] ...Non-writer

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posted on Apr, 18 2020 @ 08:49 AM
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Gasping... gasping for breath... that cool soothing oxygen mixture that is life seems far, far away... my throat dry, heaving, rasping, desperately gagging for anything that might bring relief. Light fades away as darkness engulfs me...

I just wanted a better life. Everybody does, right? Something... anything, would have been better than my existance. Every day that passed seemed to shave thin slivers off my reality, layer by layer. As I sat there on my worn and mangy couch, it came to me...

"A deal..." it whispered in my mind.
"What kind of deal?"
"The only kind..." it replied.
"Will my pain go away?" I enquired. "Will it all be okay again?"
"Most certainly"
"Then so be it"

The noose was smooth and soft, almost warm... comforting. I slipped it around my neck...

*The End*
edit on Sat Apr 18 2020 by DontTreadOnMe because: (no reason given)




posted on Apr, 18 2020 @ 09:13 AM
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a reply to: Kreeate

Well done!




posted on Apr, 18 2020 @ 09:18 AM
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originally posted by: DBCowboy
a reply to: Kreeate

Well done!



Thank you



posted on Apr, 18 2020 @ 04:21 PM
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a reply to: Kreeate

Thought provoking. I like it.



posted on Apr, 19 2020 @ 01:42 AM
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originally posted by: Onlyyouknow
a reply to: Kreeate

Thought provoking. I like it.


Thanks. I'm glad you liked it



posted on Apr, 19 2020 @ 02:42 AM
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a reply to: Kreeate

Damn that was short. It worked though, well done




posted on Apr, 19 2020 @ 07:46 AM
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originally posted by: SprocketUK
a reply to: Kreeate

Damn that was short. It worked though, well done



Thank you


I'm still learning and am hoping to "flesh out" on future stories. When I try to write, my mind floods with words, ideas and images, and sometimes it is difficult to not start rambling off on a tangent. All criticism and/or advice will be very welcome indeed.



posted on May, 12 2020 @ 08:13 AM
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a reply to: Kreeate

It's way easier to be able to write reams and reams then have to struggle to cut a story down that the other way round.

Best bit of advice I can think of is try and write things in the style of your fave authors now and then, it helps to try other voices in that way



posted on May, 16 2020 @ 08:48 AM
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a reply to: SprocketUK

Thank you for the advice. I will certainly take it to heart and give it a try.



posted on May, 20 2020 @ 03:28 AM
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a reply to: Kreeate

That's what I call "flash macabre". Nice work, s+f.



posted on May, 30 2020 @ 06:14 PM
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a reply to: DictionaryOfExcuses

Thank you kindly for the comment and praise. Much appreciated.



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