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If Leave You Must, and I Believe It So

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posted on Feb, 10 2020 @ 11:48 PM
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If leave you must, and I believe it so,
Yet, ere you go, do stay, impress on me
That which you cherish most of our memory
That, aged and past my youth of long ago,
No hope of kindling these expired limbs,
I’ll feed the empty hearth this fodder dear.
And nevermore then darkness shall I fear
No matter how my wit and eyesight dims.
My dear, you know our friendship will outlast
The fickle unrelenting trudge of time
And bound forever cherished in this rhyme,
Once written, bears record to treasures past.
Not youth, nor gold, for any promised gain
I’d trade this moment, pure despite the pain.


Thanks for checking out my sonnet, inspired by the inimitable Keats I was reading earlier tonight!

How about writing a sonnet of your own?
It's 10-11 syllables per line, ideally with every second syllable stressed.
The rhyme pattern Keats used was
ABBA CDDC EFFE GG
Artistic credit goes to my talented friend, we'll call him D.



edit on 11-2-2020 by zosimov because: (no reason given)




posted on Feb, 11 2020 @ 12:06 AM
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a reply to: zosimov

Lovely.



posted on Feb, 11 2020 @ 12:11 AM
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a reply to: TheAlleghenyGentleman

Thank you!




posted on Feb, 11 2020 @ 12:25 AM
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a reply to: zosimov

Im old and crusty but when I was a boy I used to write poetry. I think maybe that’s common but what a great release to write and feel and not care about what ones english teacher thinks.

I believe he was inspired by leigh hunt. We all owe someone. Please don't sell yourself short. Ever.



posted on Feb, 11 2020 @ 12:29 AM
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a reply to: TheAlleghenyGentleman

This comment put a huge smile on my face. What wonderful advice, thank you.

I wouldn't doubt that there's still some poetry in you just waiting to be written.



posted on Feb, 11 2020 @ 12:45 AM
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a reply to: zosimov

I sent you a P2P. I guess I was feeling open. Thank you.



posted on Feb, 11 2020 @ 07:48 AM
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I like it zosimov!
I've never seen the rhyme scheme described in the way you described it with letters.
And I'd forgotten exactly what the rules were to write a sonnet.
Good job!



posted on Feb, 11 2020 @ 07:56 AM
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a reply to: Trucker1

Thanks, Trucker!
It was really fun to write. If you try one out, let me know!



posted on Feb, 11 2020 @ 07:58 AM
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a reply to: TheAlleghenyGentleman

Sent one back, and thank you.



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