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Infinite lottery [WL2019] non-Writer

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posted on Sep, 7 2019 @ 07:04 PM
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Damn.
I did it again.
I won the lottery,
this time it is 4000 wargarbl's.
I watch myself how I freak out about it,
just to slip on the floor and hit my head hard.
I notice empathy about myself. "How strange", I think.
4000 wargarbl's must be pretty much, according to my reaction.

As I put the headset down, I wonder if I ever will win the lottery in this dimension.
edit on Sun Sep 8 2019 by DontTreadOnMe because: (no reason given)




posted on Sep, 7 2019 @ 09:13 PM
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[THE END] ....duh.... reading comprehension....



posted on Sep, 8 2019 @ 09:29 AM
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a reply to: Oleandra88

Nice Job! I liked it!!



posted on Sep, 8 2019 @ 09:59 AM
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a reply to: SyxPak
Thank you for the feedback.

Constructive critic is also very appreciated. I do not see myself get near the top3 for a couple of rounds, so I see this as a fun way to learn and hone my skills.

I just tagged it to get a bit of exposure and feedback. I know that no one really will criticize anyones submission, because they are trying to be polite. I would not do either.

So to everyone (including participants) it is explicitly wished and appreciated. Did someone notice the pattern in the line length while reading? The way the eye has to take longer trips each time as more information is revealed, was with intent.



posted on Sep, 8 2019 @ 10:03 AM
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Nice!

Cheers



posted on Sep, 8 2019 @ 10:04 AM
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a reply to: F2d5thCavv2

Thank you, too for the feedback



posted on Sep, 8 2019 @ 01:08 PM
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a reply to: Oleandra88

I Did notice it was short and to the point!
Information given in Your expanding lines Added to the Whole quite nicely!!
It is after all, a Short Story Contest! I Wish You well in It!!!



posted on Sep, 10 2019 @ 11:56 AM
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Thank you again for the feedback



posted on Sep, 10 2019 @ 11:21 PM
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a reply to: Oleandra88

With my luck I would win Publishers Clearing House Sweepstakes on another planet with a, "must be present to win" clause.



posted on Sep, 11 2019 @ 02:17 PM
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a reply to: Vroomfondel

haha I know exactly what you mean, that is my kind of luck, too.




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