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The Ultra Secret Agent. GH2019

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posted on Jan, 7 2019 @ 10:30 PM
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"Do you need anything else Judith?" Jim asked while heading to the closet to grab his coat so he could start his errands.

"No dear." answered Judith, while thinking about her recent communications with her son.
She had received a small scroll via pigeon carrier. It was written in a made up language that
she could not possibly understand, which could only mean one thing. JJ was coming home.

"Okay, well I am off."

Jim opened the closet door and immediately found himself inside the closet with the
door closed and someone's hand around his mouth.

His eyes grew wide and he muffled, "Son! Your home. Your Mothe........."

"Shhhhhhhh." JJ hissed and whispered, "Not so loud. I am always being followed, remember?"

"Oh,oh,oh, yeah. I remember. Sorry." Jim stated as silently as he could.
"Your Mother is going to be so pleased you came to visit."

"I am happy too, Dad."

"I will go get your mother."

"Okay dad"

Jim walked out of the closet and went into Judith's study and said in a low voice, "JJ's here."

Her eyes immediately lit up as Jim started motioning with his hands as a reminder that she has to act normal
so as not to draw any unwanted attention to their situation.

Judith composed herself and walked into the living room. With a confused look on her face she started to say, "Where's...",
but then she heard, "Sit down in the arm chair facing the sofa."

"There you are." she whispered as she made her way to the sofa.

Directly across the Juniper root coffee table sat JJ in the middle of the sofa. He had acquired the same design pattern and was
fully clothed in it so as to blend in and not be seen by those that were following him.

"It's great to have you home honey." Judith started with a low voice. "How have you been?"

"Oh...same ol, same ol. My job keeps me rather busy. I think that if I had realized the dedication that it takes to do this job,
before taking this job, I may have picked a different career."

Judith laughed. JJ's sense of humor often made her laugh. She always enjoyed these little visits.

"They're here." said Jim, as he entered the living room.

Judith always felt sad when they showed up to take her son back to the asylum, but he always found a way to come back home.
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posted on Jan, 7 2019 @ 10:49 PM
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a reply to: highvein

Star & flag. Loved it!



posted on Jan, 7 2019 @ 10:57 PM
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a reply to: chr0naut


Thank you Chr0naut.



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 01:41 AM
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a reply to: highvein

Loved that.
Great little twist and, despite their situation, there was a bit of happiness there.



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 02:53 AM
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a reply to: highvein

Bravo!



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 03:01 AM
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That was very well written and I certainly never had it figured for that ending.. Well done.



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 10:13 AM
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a reply to: SprocketUK

Thanks Sprocket. One day I hope to be as descriptive as you.



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 10:13 AM
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a reply to: Nothin


Thanks for reading.



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 10:14 AM
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a reply to: 727Sky


Thanks Sky, I really had to think about where I was taking this.



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 11:03 AM
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a reply to: highvein

Loved this piece highvein.




posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 11:19 AM
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a reply to: zosimov


Thanks Zos. It was a fun one to write.



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 01:26 PM
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a reply to: highvein

What an extraordinary son.

Btw, have you read Harrison Bergeron by Vonnegut? Your work reminded me (though yours is entirely original) a bit of that story. It's also a good one you can find online.

Good luck in the contest! It looks like it's going to be a good one



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 01:50 PM
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a reply to: highvein

That was very cool.



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 02:02 PM
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a reply to: highvein

Thanks for that, not sure if you're not already there



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 04:45 PM
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originally posted by: zosimov
a reply to: highvein

What an extraordinary son.

Btw, have you read Harrison Bergeron by Vonnegut? Your work reminded me (though yours is entirely original) a bit of that story. It's also a good one you can find online.

Good luck in the contest! It looks like it's going to be a good one



Harrison Bergeron. I will have to look that one up. I am not that well read, I am afraid. I love reading the stories from the ATS posters though. Thanks for the well wishes, there are so many talented writers here and I feel like I learn something from each of their stories.



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 04:48 PM
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a reply to: Kandinsky


Thanks Kandinsky. I am glad you enjoyed it.



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 05:06 PM
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originally posted by: SprocketUK
a reply to: highvein

Thanks for that, not sure if you're not already there



I started writing short stories here as sort of a personal improvement process to become better at writing. I was never one for writing or reading although I did enjoy the few times I did get immersed into the story. Your stories have that quality.



posted on Jan, 8 2019 @ 06:01 PM
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a reply to: zosimov


I just read that story. That was a great story. The Handicapper General, lol. Thanks for the recommendation.



posted on Jan, 9 2019 @ 03:20 AM
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a reply to: highvein

Yes! Just read it as well. Thanks for the recommendation Zos!
Very thought-provoking indeed.



posted on Feb, 3 2019 @ 04:46 AM
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LOL - I really liked this one, and the neat asylum twist.
Well Done You!
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