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The Fires of inspiration

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posted on May, 15 2017 @ 01:38 PM
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a reply to: Night Star

I don't mean taking anything out, but adding more detail. I kinda feel like daelim is pretty flat right now and I could probably benefit from exploring his reactions a bit more and I usually am able to phrase stuff better when I rewrite.




posted on May, 15 2017 @ 01:57 PM
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a reply to: LucidWarrior

Then by all means, go for it!



posted on May, 15 2017 @ 10:29 PM
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a reply to: Night Star

Think I'm just gonna try and finish it or get stuck first before I really revise it.

Made a good amount of work today here's an snippet, as song about Daelims fight.

"The silent one there stood
With blade against darkness,
His shield held close,
Heart thrust forward.

His eyes were alight
as he stared into the night,
His Muse right behind him.

In fury the blight descended,
Terror it screeched
As the man rushed forward.

A quick exchange
In a flurry of motion,
Blade flashing true
bade the monster
Release into light"



posted on May, 15 2017 @ 11:37 PM
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a reply to: LucidWarrior

Wonderful! The light outshines the darkness. Keep going!




posted on May, 16 2017 @ 12:02 AM
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a reply to: Night Star

I had an idea just now don't know if it goes anywhere or not yet. But I thought I might do a novel part and an epic poem companion



posted on May, 16 2017 @ 12:08 AM
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a reply to: LucidWarrior

Ahhh!!! It completely slipped my mind!!

Happy late birthday present!

XD



posted on May, 16 2017 @ 01:30 PM
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originally posted by: LucidWarrior
a reply to: LucidWarrior

Ahhh!!! It completely slipped my mind!!

Happy late birthday present!

XD


HUGS!



posted on May, 16 2017 @ 01:49 PM
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a reply to: Night Star

You know when this makes it to completion I'm gonna have to put in a HUGE thanks to you, right?



posted on May, 16 2017 @ 06:37 PM
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a reply to: LucidWarrior

Wow, really???? I would be so honored!




posted on May, 16 2017 @ 08:07 PM
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a reply to: Night Star

Well I mean you're a large part of why I'm still writing it. I'd probably still have been avoiding it otherwise.



posted on Jun, 6 2017 @ 12:59 PM
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a reply to: LucidWarrior

Night wanders the forest looking for the story teller. The wind whispers softly through her hair, birds sing and the sun shines bright. "Where are you?" She calls out into the misty forest.

Just a little shout out. Is there any more to the story?


edit on 6-6-2017 by Night Star because: (no reason given)



posted on Jun, 6 2017 @ 01:38 PM
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as she wanders, night stumbles over a man buried in the undergrowth! He gasps and then groans as her foot hits his ribs. He rolls slowly over and sits up, rubbing his face in his hands. He looks at nightstar like one waking from a nightmare, but already her presence did wonders to soothe his wildness. He smiles, weakly at first but with growing confidence as his eyes grow clearer and less clouded.

It happened, from time to time, that the young man would lose his clarity and I intelligent focus and would roam like a wild animal. But the maiden would not let him alone, she searched for him, like the cook voice of hope. She restored him, and in her presence and his absence, he found something there, a blossom, still barely fledging, that she tended to in this wild man. He looks at night, his expression torn between hope and despair, between trust and fear, and his eyes are begging for a hug and his mouth unable to speak.



posted on Jun, 7 2017 @ 03:18 AM
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Night figured she would find the scribe somewhere, but not by tumbling over him, hidden beneath the undergrowth. How very odd she thought. Perplexed, she stands, wiping off the dried leaves and dirt from her dress. "I...I'm so sorry! I didn't mean to alarm you. I was just...searching and hoping that perhaps you would tell me more of your story." Shyly she looked down at him. The Elf wondered where this man had come from, why his eyes spoke of mixed emotions. She could usually sense such things yet it was as though this mysterious man lived in the mists of time, never truly revealing himself. It clouded her senses, left her bewildered, yet ever curious.



posted on Jun, 7 2017 @ 03:20 AM
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Sorry, didn't mean to barge in on your story but it's late, the shed was empty and I was left unsupervised. Plus you inspire me. LOL



posted on Jun, 7 2017 @ 06:42 AM
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Had to answer you before I left to sleep. You aren't barging in at all! This is as much a part of my own story as fires itself. You're awesome nightstar, and you inspire me as well. Goodnight!



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