Mountain of Love

I've had a few, I'm sure most of you did too
The really answer is baby I want you

Life isn't the same with you beside me
don't know where to start to see

i am sorry, I am sorry, but I'm not gonna
lie
i am sorry, I am sorry, but I'm not gonna
lie

The hurt is making me feel bad
painful, deep hurt and sad

I will always love you that is
for sure
Sweet love I hoped to be pure

Tasting love that never was real
what a fall so surreal

I may have lost, but I may learned
about me. Peace Forever!

a reply to: 4U1TruthTeller


Everything was fine until the last line...then ur flow kinda died?

originally posted by: Mousygretchen
a reply to: 4U1TruthTeller


Everything was fine until the last line...then ur flow kinda died?

thank you for your constructive advice and for taking the time to read my poem. It just ended Peace

a reply to: Mousygretchen

There is no such thing as "ur flow kinda died" when someone is expressing themselves in poetry.

a reply to: 4U1TruthTeller

Very nice OP. I enjoyed it. You know what they say " It's better to have lost...than never to have loved at all"

originally posted by: EchoesInTime
a reply to: Mousygretchen

There is no such thing as "ur flow kinda died" when someone is expressing themselves in poetry.

Could you please show/point out that phrase? I do not see it. Thank you

originally posted by: EchoesInTime
a reply to: Mousygretchena

There is no such thing as "ur flow kinda died" when someone is expressing themselves in poetry.

you are wrong. Now the honorable thing to do is admit and reconstruct your view. Constructive Advice (tm)

originally posted by: 4U1TruthTeller

originally posted by: EchoesInTime
a reply to: Mousygretchen

There is no such thing as "ur flow kinda died" when someone is expressing themselves in poetry.

Could you please show/point out that phrase? I do not see it. Thank you

I was referring to mousygretchens post.

originally posted by: EchoesInTime

originally posted by: 4U1TruthTeller

originally posted by: EchoesInTime
a reply to: Mousygretchen

There is no such thing as "ur flow kinda died" when someone is expressing themselves in poetry.

Could you please show/point out that phrase? I do not see it. Thank you

I was referring to mousygretchens post.

Peace

a reply to: 4U1TruthTeller

I think the poem is basic and poorly constructed, but it's all personal opinion and taste so I'm sure others will like it.
Peace.

*edit*
If the poem is about losing the love then surely the line should be "life isn't the same without..." not "with"
Namaste.

a reply to: 4U1TruthTeller


Very sweet, you should reach out again