Good work. Especially liked that part where he resolved his conflict with a gun. Apple pie and the American way, all on one page.

Well amuk I managed to "persuade" my husband into taking me with him next week on his "business" trip I am going with him for 3 days.

You planted the seed on my hart so now I have to find out.

By the way I will pick my daughter on our way so she can keep me company "just in case"

Well I think thats sweet M.

Anyway back to work again-lol.

Thats really awesome man, keep on writing

What can I say-lol

Good work, dont know about the resaerch though

i like the story and i hate working on wknds

I am so happy everybody enjoyed that short story. I for one did too However, I found half way through I was reading too much. Although it had a good plot, I found the amount of information was a little much after the second paragraph

Just some critisism for ya. dont mean to offend. I am no writer by all means but I enjoy a good read, and yours was interesting.

That was the point, to bore you with his rather dull life before you found out what he really did.

but it is a good story

I hate jobs that make me work on the weekends like mcdonalds and other chain food restaurants

I know this the bank holiday, but I thought why not?

Anyway have fun, I l know I will.

Ramble Ramble!-lol.

Double post. Oh dear

Right back to what I was saying.

I dont like working weekends, but someone has to do it

wow, this is the first short story i have read on ats, and i want more now because of you. I hope you keep on posting.... im at a loss of words

Well I have to work this sunday, shame!

Good story though

I had to bump this for a friend that couldnt find it aand wanted to read it