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Orphans

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posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 05:05 PM
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Orphans

They met one night in the pouring rain
waiting for that final train.

Said one to the other
I seem to have just lost my mother.
To hear the reply
the same happened to me
a long time ago.
And ever since then I've
wandered to and fro.
exchanged my roots
for traveling boots.
One thing left I'd like to know.
Is there anywhere worthwhile to go?

Despite the rumble
of the approaching train,
they sought some shelter
from the pouring rain.
Beneath a tree
they huddled together,
protecting each other
from the inclement weather.

That train came and went
without those two.
Seems they found something
much better to do.



edition revised for 2016 because word definitions change




posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 05:08 PM
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a reply to: pthena

Loved it!

Very cute ending.




posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 05:21 PM
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a reply to: TNMockingbird

Thank you.

I was trying to make the ending shocking and scandalous. "Why the very idea! Missing the train!"

But cute works.

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posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 05:32 PM
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posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 05:56 PM
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a reply to: BigBrotherDarkness

Thank you, I never thought about that song much, but yeah, fits.

Slight variation of the poem theme


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posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 06:09 PM
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a reply to: pthena

Oh!

Well perhaps were they looking for the same mother?

That may be shocking and scandalous.

hehe



posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 06:14 PM
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a reply to: TNMockingbird

Whoa! Just whoa!

Could work


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posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 06:32 PM
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a reply to: pthena

So, what are they doing!?!


Nice



posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 06:43 PM
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a reply to: Jennyfrenzy


So, what are they doing!?!

I thought it was obvious, getting less wet,
from the rain you know.



posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 07:27 PM
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a reply to: pthena

Amazing and like what Chirp said "cute ending."



posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 07:31 PM
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a reply to: pthena

It was, just being silly



posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 07:57 PM
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a reply to: pthena

I have found it's not the destination... because it's always arriving I don't know how the future could not ever be arriving tbph. yet there's always that any moment now so everything is always exciting even when it's not



posted on Aug, 11 2016 @ 08:44 PM
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a reply to: Quantum12

Thank you. This sub forum is nice.



posted on Aug, 14 2016 @ 12:55 PM
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a reply to: pthena






One thing left I'd like to know. Is there anywhere worthwhile to go?



I can certainly relate to that.
Great poem, by the way.




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