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Heya ATS. Wanna help give my poem a title?

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posted on May, 8 2016 @ 09:58 PM
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Special thanks to Quantum12 for sparking the idea.

So, I've been leaving a poem I wrote hidden in various jobs I've worked for about the last 22 or so years. It has never had a title. I haven't been able to give it a title with the same weight that the poem carries for me.

So, now I will share my poem and see if ATS can help come up with the missing piece.


The as of yet nameless poem is as follows.

The clearest pictures kept in mind
Will fade away in given time,
Faces, places, left behind
In shadows hiding, hard to find.

You see my face? A smiling lie,
A darkened soul behind bright eyes,
A bitter taste in sweet disguise,
Your hellos met by my goodbyes.

In darkest days, through rain and mist,
I drink my fate with lemon twist,
And try to grasp with clenching fists,
To realities which do not exist.

There you have it folks. Short, sour and to the point.

Have fun with it.




posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:04 PM
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Concealed Construction of False Realities

Horrible, but eh. Gave it a shot.



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:14 PM
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a reply to: Bobaganoosh

good poem



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:16 PM
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I usually don't do anything poetry related by screw it " Realities sourly twisted illusions".
Best my stoned brain can come up with what with all the swelling.



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:18 PM
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a reply to: Bobaganoosh

How about, through the bitter sweet veil?



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:19 PM
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Ode to another Swan Song?



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:20 PM
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Whenever I'm asked what to name some random bit of art I always suggest the same name: The Lonesome Pollywog. For whatever it's worth.



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:31 PM
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a reply to: Bobaganoosh

no one cares.....









is the title i would pick



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:37 PM
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All good stuff. I gotta say, I'm liking intrptr's take.

The polliwog made me laugh.



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:42 PM
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a reply to: Bobaganoosh

How about we call it "Alzheimer Strikes Again!"

Obviously that was a joke, but the content had me thinking of someone trying to get a grip on reality while living with Alzheimer . Do I read into things too much?



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:43 PM
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a reply to: stabstab

I like yours as well. Thanks for taking a double stab at it.



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:45 PM
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"Another Drink Darkly"

Eh it was worth a try.



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:46 PM
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a reply to: AmericanRealist

Naw, that's a very interesting take. I hadn't considered the parallels.



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:49 PM
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a reply to: Bobaganoosh

A more appealing title that kind of says the same thing in my mind would be "Existence Within Oblivion" or something along that line.



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:50 PM
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a reply to: Bobaganoosh

Your poem is deep and is well writen.

Name 1: Twenty 2 years in a time machine!
OR
Name 2: Cherry frog lips with Red Lizzard lips.

Name 2 will get attention! Name 1 is more true!
LOL
Awesome Poem!



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 10:51 PM
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a reply to: CoBaZ

That reminds me of one of my favorite lines from The Dark Tower saga.

"You darkle, you tinct..."

I thought it was a profound way to describe one who's darkness shines.



posted on May, 8 2016 @ 11:24 PM
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a reply to: Bobaganoosh

Sour soul..



posted on May, 9 2016 @ 12:02 AM
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A nameless poem.



posted on May, 9 2016 @ 12:08 AM
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a reply to: Bobaganoosh

_interred_ ?

Props on the poem


If its been unnamed for years why not leave it that way. Unless you're really looking to title it.
edit on 9-5-2016 by Inarismessenger because: (no reason given)



posted on May, 9 2016 @ 12:09 AM
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a reply to: Bobaganoosh

Fade to Black.



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