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Loop [PIC2016]

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posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 08:22 PM
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The world spun and settled and he staggered forward a step, dead leaves crunching under his feet. He heard the sound of someone walking behind him. Filled with fear, he hurried onward through the forest of barren trees.

Cold moonlight filtered through the naked branches, giving enough illumination for him to see a vague shadow darting into a crumbling old mansion up ahead. Something about the shadow was familiar and compelled him to the dark opening.

Nobody was visible when he entered. Instead, he was confronted with a creepy angel statue that guarded a grand staircase.

It reminded him of the Weeping Angels from the Doctor Who episodes he'd watched. Unnerved, and not wanting to take his eyes off of the thing for fear it would come alive and attack him, he backed up the staircase. He breathed much easier when he reached the upper landing. He took a couple of steps and felt something crunch under his feet. He stumbled and looked down. As if the statue wasn't spooky enough, what he saw was somehow worse. Severed doll heads littered the floor.

A sound from down the hall drew his attention. Cursing himself for a fool, he continued down the moonlit hall toward a room at the end. Amid a jumble of debris stood a mirror.

Dark light pulsed from it. Unable to stop himself, he continued forward until he was standing in front of it. He leaned forward and studied his dim reflection. The dark light flashed out and consumed him.

The world spun and settled and he staggered forward a step, dead leaves crunching under his feet. He heard the sound of someone walking behind him. Filled with fear, he hurried onward through the forest of barren trees.




posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 08:25 PM
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a reply to: Skid Mark
Nice writing my friend!!!



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 08:27 PM
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a reply to: Quantum12
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. It all came to me at once.



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 08:38 PM
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a reply to: Skid Mark

Oh no!

We'll never know who was coming up behind him?!

Cliffhanger!

Good one!

Loved it!




posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 08:45 PM
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a reply to: Skid Mark
Awesome writing Skid!!! Great twist!!!


edit on 4/11/2016 by Martin75 because: The Shed Rocks!



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 08:54 PM
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a reply to: TNMockingbird
Thank you.
It was him. He was coming behind himself.

edit on 11-4-2016 by Skid Mark because: (no reason given)



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 08:55 PM
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a reply to: Martin75
Thanks. It came to me all at once. I love it when that happens.



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 08:57 PM
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Wow! But...but...What happens next???? Good story Hun!



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:00 PM
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a reply to: Night Star
Thanks.
It all happens all over again.



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:09 PM
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Good story! I wish I could give you an extra point for mentioning Doctor Who.



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:14 PM
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I. LOVE. THIS. AND. YOU.!!!



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:29 PM
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a reply to: Errollorre
Thanks. Ever since I saw those episodes I look at the statues a lot differently.



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:30 PM
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a reply to: geezlouise
Thanks. You're not so bad yourself.



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:40 PM
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Yep, the loop idea ... I was putting the concept together today at work.


I thought I could maybe do it, but you beat me to it! Nice work.



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:43 PM
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a reply to: ketsuko
Thanks. It reminds me of the last part of the Dark Tower series.



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:44 PM
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a reply to: Skid Mark

My idea was playing off of Alice Through the Looking Glass.


It was decidedly different but too much the same at the same time.



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:46 PM
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a reply to: ketsuko

Christopher I saw you...lol



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:47 PM
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a reply to: ketsuko
I like the looking glass idea. You could still pull it off and have it be different.



posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:48 PM
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I enjoyed that Skid! LOOP! Good work!




posted on Apr, 11 2016 @ 09:49 PM
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a reply to: ladyinwaiting
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.



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