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MARY [Halloween 2015]

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posted on Oct, 5 2015 @ 01:22 PM

Mary giggled like a 5 year old as she ran to meet her friend, even though she was "all grown up" at the grand old age of 9!
She had told mum that she was "Trick or Treating" with Susan, but had decided to surprise her instead by turning up un-announced and giving Susan a fright!
Her costume was indeed pretty scary; A big black cloak with a huge black hood, partially obscuring her grisly, pale make-up, complete with large nose, warts and dark eye shadow and she carried an old twig "witches" broom under her arm.

It was only 2 blocks to Susan's house, but it felt like so much further as she skipped along, her heart beating faster at the prospect of all the fun and treats that she had in store. She glanced up and thought she could see Susan's dad, there in the distance. She squinted her eyes against the low setting sun, trying to focus on the man as she carelessly stepped off the kerb, then FROZE in TERROR as she heard the horrible SCREEEEECH! of tyres coming towards her.
The car hit her so hard that she must have landed about 15 feet away from the point of impact, and she braced herself for the inevitable surge of unbearable pain that was to come. But by some miracle, she managed to roll away, and spring back to her feet, Without so much as a scratch!

"WOW! That was lucky" she thought; "But I need to be much more careful or mum will kill me!!"

Looking up ahead, she did indeed see the figure of Susan's dad. He was carrying boxes of various sweets and candies into the house.
She liked him. He was one of the few people in the neighbourhood who ever said "hello" or even smiled at her, but on this occasion he disappeared into the house just as she got to the end of their drive.
"Ah well" she pondered; "maybe I can hide, and scare them when they come out Trick or Treating???"

Sure enough, just a couple of minutes had passed before Susan's door opened and her dad appeared again, this time in the company of a scary clown and a little white-sheeted Ghost!

"That'll be Susan and little Mikey" Mary thought, as she giggled again at the thought of scaring them, and crouched down behind the bushes by the end of their driveway, then slipped into formation just behind them as they started making their way down the street.

It was a quiet street, with Mary's house right at the top of a long straight road, which then looped past Susan's place and back again after just a few hundred yards. A mixture of young families and older couples lived there but there were really only about 5 or 6 houses that ever took part in the Halloween fun, with all the others pretending to be out, or even putting signs up saying "No Trick or Treats HERE!"

Mary's thought's turned back to her plan to scare Susan, and she quickened her pace to fall step-by-step in line with her, before gently touching her neck with her little finger!!
Susan yelped and shivered as she shook her head from side to side...
"Ewww!!! DAD! I felt a Bug!!! it was on my neck!!"
"Ooooooh, maybe it was a BIG SPIDER!!" he teased, wiggling his fingers like a tarantula!

Mary began to think that this was MUCH more fun than the prospect of "just" going Trick or treating, so she slowed her pace again and managed to hide behind a tree just as the ghoulish family turned into the next driveway on the Trick or Treating adventure.

"I think I'll get little Mikey this time!!!" she smirked, as she waited for them to re-appear. But before they re-emerged her heart stopped at the sudden sound of a loud "HISSS!" right behind her... She froze in terror as the Hiss got Louder and LOUDER! and it took all of her strength and courage to force herself to turn and face the source of this unearthly sound...
She slowly, ever so slowly, turned her head and there, no more than three feet away was.... a little grey kitten! Staring and hissing at her.
She let out a heavy sigh of relief, then smiled at her own sillyness and shooed the kitten away just as she heard the excited voices of Mikey and Susan coming back down the drive.

Once more, she fell into step right behind them without being noticed, and this time she tickled the little Ghost who's arms were raised to hold onto his dad and big sisters hands!
Mikey let out the most glorious giggle-cum-laugh that Mary had ever heard, and she almost blew the whole affair by letting out a small laugh herself but luckily Susan and her Dad had both joined in roaring with laughter too! Both bemused by Mikey's sudden outburst.

This pattern now continued for each of the houses the family visited, with Mary becoming more and more devious in her attempts at scaring them as they made their way around the loop in the road... a tickle here, a scratch there... she remained undiscovered but nothing seemed to really startle them until she heard Susans Dad say; "What the...???" with definite alarm in his voice.

Mary was convinced she'd finally spooked them until she realised that he was looking far up the street, back past Susan's house, to where the car had screeched to a halt earlier.
Susan's dad turned to the kids and barked; "Go Inside... Now!" and started to make his way towards the blue flashing lights which seemed to come out of nowhere.
Mary didn't know what to do, was she to go inside with Susan or...?

It was then that she heard her own mother.,, and she was calling Mary's name!

"Mum!! I'm over here!" she answered, but her mum didn't hear her.
She was crouched by the roadside about 15 feet from the car which had stopped there, and she was holding something...
Mary ran towards her... "Mum, what's wrong?? MUM!!!"
But Mum didn't pay any notice, she was rocking back and forth, howling in grief as she cuddled the limp, lifeless, black-cloaked figure of her only daughter;
edit on 5-10-2015 by Gordi The Drummer because: grammar, spelling and i am an idiot

posted on Oct, 5 2015 @ 02:33 PM
a reply to: Gordi The Drummer

Oh no. That was a bit traumatic when it dawned on me why they couldn't see her.

Poor wee Mary.

That was so well written, it flowed so easily - well done, Gordi. True horror and perfect prose.

Have a S&F !

B x

posted on Oct, 5 2015 @ 02:45 PM
Well done Gordi! Well done!

posted on Oct, 5 2015 @ 03:53 PM

originally posted by: Night Star
Well done Gordi! Well done!

I thank you very much Ms Star! LOL


posted on Oct, 5 2015 @ 10:16 PM
Well done Sir. I enjoyed that very much.

posted on Oct, 6 2015 @ 01:39 AM
a reply to: Vroomfondel

Cheers Vroom!
Thanks for stopping by!


posted on Oct, 6 2015 @ 10:53 PM
I thoroughly enjoyed the little prankster Mary and was eerily saddened by the end of this excellent Halloween tale. Good job

posted on Oct, 8 2015 @ 01:08 AM

originally posted by: peppycat
I thoroughly enjoyed the little prankster Mary and was eerily saddened by the end of this excellent Halloween tale. Good job

Aww Thanks peppy!
It was very nice of you to take the time & trouble to read and comment.
Much appreciated!

posted on Oct, 8 2015 @ 02:22 AM
I couldn't leave the story like that.... just couldn't!!!


A single moment of abject grief overcame poor Mary, as the sudden horrible realisation of what had just happened hit home.
She dropped to her knees, sobbing, open-mouthed...just staring at her mother as the paramedics tried to prise the lifeless body from her grasp.
Her mum's cries cut her to the very soul and she could swear that she could feel her tears as they dropped down onto her own face.

As quickly as the grief had come... it was suddenly gone, and a serenity like nothing she had ever felt flowed all around her.
She saw the medics lay her body out flat, pulling open the front of her halloween cloak... checking for a heartbeat... listening for breath... but she knew in her own heart that it was too late.

She saw the blood seep through her leggings and let out a curious smirk as she noted the strange angle that her thigh was jutting out at. It just looked so... "weird" she thought to herself, "like a rag-doll".
It was somehow like watching a movie. She was observing it from a distance, detached and safe from its grasp.

Mary began to feel dizzy, like she was floating adrift on a small boat. Her mum looked so small as she knelt, staring at the face of the paramedic, searching forlornly for any sign of hope. Mum was becoming... hazy?
It was hard to focus, like a fog was swirling all around her, and Mary felt like she was falling into a dream.
The light was changing from the dusky tones that had been there just seconds before into a beautiful golden glow, and Mary turned around to see what she thought was the most incredible sunrise EVER!

The light was becoming intensely bright, almost blue in the centre but fading through yellows, golds and shades of orange out towards the edges.
She felt drawn to this beautiful sight, and she had almost forgotten the chaotic scene that was now unfolding behind her...

"150 joules... CLEAR!"

It reached Mary's ear like a distant whisper... "Jewels??? what do they want jewels for??"
The light reached out to her and warmed her to the core, this was no normal sunrise! and anyway... hadn't it only been a few seconds since the....?


Mary suddenly felt a burst of energy in her chest, it exploded out sending tingles up through her neck... down her arms... and legs...
It was then that Mary screamed with pain. Her left leg felt like someone had just stabbed it with a red-hot poker. She collapsed to the ground in agony, clutching at her thigh...

She opened her eyes to see the light once more. Dimmer than before, but still beautiful and calm and serene. Her pain eased and she rose to her feet again.

"Let's try 200... CLEAR!"

The light was growing once more, caressing her, healing her pain... she felt herself drawn to it's power, it's beauty...


Something slammed into Mary's chest, knocking her off her feet, away from the light. The sudden rush of tingling energy engulfed her and the searing agony of her broken leg returned once more.
She screamed, and clutched at her thigh... and suddenly realised that she could hear her Mum crying again...

"MUM! MUM!! I'm HERE!!"

The paramedics shoulders slumped as he sat the paddles of the defibrilator down by Marys side and slowly shook his head.

"I'm so sorry" he whispered, as Mary's Mum let out a cry that only a newly-berieved mother can summon from the depths of her heart.

"No, Noooo... no. n mum .. . I . . . i . . i'm .. . . . s t i l l . . . "
Mary began to drift away again...
"I lo ve y o u . . . mum!" and the light engulfed her tiny frame and pulled her away.

Her Mum suddenly stopped crying and a look of steely determination came to her face.
She turned to the nearest paramedic...
"I can feel her. She's here. and YOU are NOT going to give up on her.... NOT YET." she said firmly as she held the paramedic in her gaze....

The moment hung for what seemed and age... and then... then...

"OK - give me 300 joules! NOW! CLEAR!!"


A HUGE Explosion of energy and pain engulfed Mary one last time and it was just too much for her to bear, she blacked out, lost consciousness and fell limply to the ground.

There are no words that can convey the feelings of isolation and utter loneliness that creep into the soul when you are faced with complete silence and total darkness.

No sound, no smell, no warmth, no light... you drift alone on your journey - destination unknown.

The light when it came, hurt Mary's eyes. She blinked and screwed up her face and blinked again.
There were fuzzy, indistinct shapes there. Mostly white... some... turquoise blue??
There was movement... Mary blinked again... yes definitely movement... and a strange beeping noise...
Like one of those heart monitors they have in the..... in the HOSPITAL!

She blinked again, and her little eyes began to clear... she could see ceiling tiles.... a curtain rail... a fluorescent strip light... and there, to her left... was Mum, sitting by the hospital bed... smiling.

"Happy Halloween Mary" was all she said, as mother and daughter hugged like they had never hugged before.

edit on 8-10-2015 by Gordi The Drummer because: spelling

posted on Oct, 8 2015 @ 06:57 AM
Gordi - The new ending is perfect!!!!! I love your writing style. You are always able to put me right into the story. And then you made me go from sad tears to happy ones! What a trick! Or a treat

posted on Oct, 8 2015 @ 11:31 AM
S&F.. great story!

posted on Oct, 8 2015 @ 12:35 PM
a reply to: Martin75

Aww Thanks Jessie, you are way toooooooo kind!

a reply to: OpinionatedB

Thank you so much OB! much appreciated!

Big G

posted on Oct, 8 2015 @ 04:14 PM
So happy Mary made it! Thank you for the happy ending.

posted on Oct, 9 2015 @ 05:55 AM

originally posted by: peppycat
So happy Mary made it! Thank you for the happy ending.

You are very welcome peppy!

...BUT.... did she REALLY make it????? Duhhn Duhhnnn DUHHHHHNNN!!!!!

There could be a scary, Halloweeny Part 3.....

Thanks again!

posted on Oct, 9 2015 @ 07:29 AM
MARY - Part Three

Mary felt so small and fragile in her mother’s arms, she was squeezing so hard it almost hurt!
“Hey Mum! You’re hurting me!” she cried.
But her mum wasn’t for letting her go, not now, not after all they’d been through...

“You are the cutest little thing! Yes you are!” She said, in a strange “baby” voice, wiggling her head from side to side like you would if you were talking to a new-born.
“Are you hungry? Do you want some Dinner? Yes you do! Yes You Do!”

“What is going on with mum???” Mary thought to herself, “Maybe this has shaken her up more than I thought?”

“Are you....OK Mum? You’re acting a little bit.... weird!” Mary asked.

“Will I get you some nice food? And a dish of water? You must be hungry, you’ve been out of it for hours!” mum responded, almost robotically, and with that she went to the far side of the room and opened a packet of “something or other”, pouring some into a little dish and setting it down beside Mary’s head.

Mary looked down at the little dish and frowned as she saw it was full of..... Nuts!
“Mum! You know I’m allergic!” she protested, and she automatically raised her hand to scratch the itch that was growing behind her ear, then watched slightly bemused, as a single piece of straw fell down in front of her.

Mary felt a great sense of unease, something definitely wasn’t quite “right” here... and finally she blurted out;
“What is going on??? Where did THAT come from??? Didn’t they clean me up when they brought me in here??? And why are you acting so weird Mum???”

But her mum just smiled at her, and repeated her baby-voice mantra; “You are sooooo cute! Yes you are!!”
At that point the door swung open, and a man in turquoise hospital scrubs came into the room carrying a clipboard.
Mary noticed his ID tag, it said that he was “Dr. J.Martin MRCVS DDVA of HAH”?

“Ahhh, Mrs Munro – I’m glad I caught you, this is the strangest case I’ve ever had to work on!” He said, “Little Mary’s been through the mill alright, we’re still trying to work out exactly what happened to her. It’s clearly....”her” but how this came to be is anyone’s guess at this stage. Did she have any contact with Squirrels before the accident?”

“WHAAAAT??” Mary was by this time, completely baffled by what was happening around her... “Squirrels?? What on earth do Squirrels have to do with anything????”

“We were speculating” the doctor added, “that during the defibrillation process... if a grey squirrel had been in close proximity... that....well... “something” could have got.... you know... mixed up when she......erm....”

“I’m not sure” replied mum, “there are squirrels in the trees, down by her friend Susan’s place.... but... I...”

Mary’s mind raced back to when she was hiding in the bushes, and how a strange grey “kitten” had hissed at her.
“Was that really a Kitten???? What do Grey Squirrels look like anyway???? And what has all this got to do with me??”
She bowed her head and went to cry, but suddenly realised that she had somehow picked up a nut from the dish and was gnawing on it ravenously! It was DELICIOUS!!! It was AMAZING!!!! She had NEVER tasted anything so good in her entire life!!!! And.... best of all... no reaction! No Allergy!

“WoooHoooo!!!” she thought, “This crazy accident might not have been so bad after all!!”
“Aww look!” Said her mum lovingly; “I knew you were hungry!”

And with that, her mum and the Doctor left the room, leaving Mary nibbling and chewing away on the surprisingly filling little dish of nuts.
It took another few minutes before the dish lay empty, and Mary slumped back on the bed and began to properly survey her surroundings. It looked more like a kitchen than how she imagined a hospital to be. There were worktops and strange plastic dishes stacked to one side, some white boxes with barcodes and numbers and a big metal sink with.... a Mirror!

“Maybe if I could get down off the bed and across to the sink?” she thought to herself... “I’d be able to get to that mirror and see just how bad I look after the accident”, so she rolled over and peered down off the bed and was shocked to find that the bed was really REALLY HIGH off the ground. Undeterred, she grabbed hold of the fabric that was covering her bed and lowered herself over the edge.

“That’s strange as well!” she said out loud; “this bed has sack-cloth over it stuffed with.... straw??”
She began to think that she might be just a little bit crazy... or maybe they had given her some mad drugs or something like the crazy guy her dad had seen in the park that day... but she felt that she just had to make it to that mirror... only then would she be able to see for herself how bad things were, so she carried on down the sack-cloth bedding and finally made it to the cold tiled floor. Quickly she scurried over the tiles and found herself looking up at the big unit which held the sink.

“Why is that soooo big?? Is this a hospital for giants or something??” she puzzled; “I MUST get up there, I just HAVE to find out what’s going on!”

So she worked her way along the base of the big unit until she came to the curtain which hung next to the door and started to climb.
She was pleasantly surprised at how easy the climb seemed to be, she had never really been any good at climbing before, and in no time at all she had reached the worktop by the big sink...
She took a step to her left, then another, and finally a third as she approached the front of the mirror, her heart pounding furiously, and she gulped nervously as her gaze reached up towards the shiny glass surface...

It had a sticker on the top corner which read “Holloway Animal Hospital”
“Animal Hospital??????? This doesn’t make ANY SENSE!!!!! WHAT’S GOING ON?????” she screamed, as her gaze fell down the length of the mirror, until, at last, there at the bottom, she finally found her own reflection in the glass....









posted on Oct, 9 2015 @ 07:35 AM
a reply to: Gordi The Drummer

Damn you!

posted on Oct, 9 2015 @ 07:55 AM

originally posted by: beansidhe
a reply to: Gordi The Drummer

Damn you!

WOW Beans you were quick off the mark there!!!


posted on Oct, 9 2015 @ 11:42 AM
Finally caught up with part 2 and 3. Ok, that was wild! Talk about a surprise ending! Well done Gordi! Creepy, but well done! LOL

posted on Oct, 9 2015 @ 01:58 PM
a reply to: Gordi The Drummer

You're a tease bro LMAO

Nice one mate, very well written, especially like part one, part two was excellent, part three tease


posted on Oct, 9 2015 @ 05:51 PM
a reply to: Gordi The Drummer

Gordi you are such a mess! What a funny ending! !

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