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My heart. My life.

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posted on Mar, 1 2015 @ 05:07 AM
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The truth in my heart is for no one to see.
The truth of my heart is only for me.

The joy in my heart is less than before.
The joy that I feel, I have little place to store.

The sadness in me is overflowing inside.
This pain inside me has nowhere else to hide.

The tears in my eyes are coming from my heart.
A heart in pain like it was pierced by a dart.

A smile on my face is fighting with my mind.
There is no happiness but I want to be kind.

The feelings in my heart are hidden from the rest.
All this feelings I have inside is just one big test.

I will not let them overcome me, I will push them back down.
I will wear some joy and happiness like the paint on a clown.

Never again will I let this pain keep me down on the ground.
A life with showing happiness, now how does that sound?

edit on 1-3-2015 by IndependentOpinion because: (no reason given)




posted on Mar, 1 2015 @ 05:47 AM
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a reply to: IndependentOpinion

disclaimer- I dont write or do poetry so salt and pinch

I have read it three times
To me self absorption is unattractive
But even worse is self pity.

Art is about saying the same old thing but in a fresh way


I dunno what this means-mistake?


The tears in my eyes are coming from my heart. I heart in pain like it was pierced by a dart.


You need a killer vocabulary to get original rhymes

Kudos for putting it out there



posted on Mar, 1 2015 @ 06:19 AM
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a reply to: Borisbanger

It was not written in self pity or anything. I just chose a main theme (Pain), and went with it. All my poems is written this way.


And it was a mistake, sorry.

I wrote this in a few seconds and posted. And I haven't written in 2 months, so I tried to write something new.
And English in not my home language.

But thanks for taking a look.
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posted on Mar, 1 2015 @ 07:16 AM
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a reply to: IndependentOpinion

Creativity is about reaching out
Audience Indifference kills the impulse
Dont stop



posted on Mar, 1 2015 @ 09:26 AM
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a reply to: IndependentOpinion

All that considered, you did an amazing job. Thanks for the morning pick-me-up.



posted on Mar, 1 2015 @ 09:35 AM
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a reply to: CretumOrbis

Thanks and pleasure



posted on Mar, 1 2015 @ 01:46 PM
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a reply to: IndependentOpinion

I like this..I always like the ones that are written in moments and thrown up..Really, they are the ones that show the true emotion/intention of the person. They let me see who you are, what your about, better than any others.

Thank you for letting me see who you are..



blend57



posted on Mar, 1 2015 @ 02:12 PM
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a reply to: blend57

You are the first person to put it like that, and I have written a few. And you are correct.

Thank you for adding that.



posted on Mar, 5 2015 @ 05:19 PM
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a reply to: IndependentOpinion

I'm a couple days late seeing this!? Sorry that Man!!
Very good and well written Poem here!!! Very good Indeed!!!



posted on Mar, 5 2015 @ 11:16 PM
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a reply to: SyxPak

No problem Syx, and you missed another one also.

Thanks!!



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