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Doomsday By Design -- Collaborative Story [ WORKING THREAD] [Updated!]

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posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 04:34 AM
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Anyone, more than one or none


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posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 04:46 AM
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a reply to: pheonix358

Well I spent a bit working on a reply, I didnt realize Alan responded, so...Jack has as well now.
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posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 04:59 AM
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a reply to: Wookiep

Great!

That is what would happen in the real world. Some will help, the others knowing they can't do anything more will watch.



posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 05:02 AM
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Man, that was messed up...then again my dream was too. We all have our own issues.. What does this all mean?? Is there something bigger going on here??


That was nice. Many possibilities!

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posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 05:09 AM
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Ok guys, I'm off to bed now. Hopefully we can get to the next chapter by tomorrow. Really good writing everyone, you guys are all really good!



posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 05:17 AM
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Later wookie have a good sleep .. and great writing ..



posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 06:12 AM
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Kenney Rogers


Really, that was great! Kenny Rogers eh, who would have guessed. lol

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posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 07:15 AM
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originally posted by: pheonix358



Kenney Rogers


Really, that was great! Kenny Rogers eh, who would have guessed. lol

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Hard for me to remember all the names and I am to lazy and stupid to have written them down when I first used them.. Kenny I could remember.


We are at a part in the story where Jason and the teams are about to exit..Two possibilities
1 they show up for extraction and are mowed down by V-22 mini guns.. Jason's last vision is of a smiling Ray Hendrix Frigging Spooks

2 they are extracted and everything goes as planned. Ryujin has a secure channel in his bunker home and he gave a card to John with the contact details. It might be good for the story line at a later date to have friends on the outside?
Totally up to you guys who have put the effort into this story. If the teams escape they are going for the big one... to cut the head off the snakes that planned this and they will be seizing power at some date in the future. Can anyone spell Military coup? That will be their plan and they will succeed for that is the way I would write it... Unless they all die as option one which in that case thanks for letting me participate...

Do not forget if you guys get in a story line block there are around 400 survivors on the south side of town which you can draw out to meet your ends.. I will wait for your opinions before I write an obituary.... or start making plans for a military take over.... Again thanks I have not been interested in characters for many years..It was work, but it was good work



posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 07:23 AM
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Option 2 .. dont kill off the team have the extraction go as planned .. got a couple ideas for things to come with them .. they too good to waste ..



posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 07:24 AM
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a reply to: 727Sky

I am just reacting in character as the story unfolds and finding it great to do.

I do not care where the story goes but night angel has it mapped out I think.

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posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 07:25 AM
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But first want to see the other characters develop and grow before reveal anything else ..



posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 07:55 AM
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Just sent this to Expat in a u2u but I figure ill let you all know what's going down. Church is actually asleep on the floor of the Bunker right now. He woke up for a second when the explosion happened but fell right back asleep when he realized there was no threat. He is both mentally and physically exhausted. Not to mention a heavy sleeper, so once he is asleep its hard to get him up, short of actually physically shaking him awake.

My phone was off yesterday so I couldn't get on. I went back and read this morning, however. Really great stuff guys. I'm proud to be a part of such a talented group of writers!

And Sky, I think Jason should survive, personally. That all depends on whether you, as a writer, are looking for an out or whether you want to continue writing. Your contribution thus far has been nothing short of stellar and has added a lot of depth and expertise to the story as a whole.



posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 08:14 AM
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a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat

Thank you for your kind words.. I have actually had fun.. My wife seems to have thought on more than one occasion that I have had a stroke for I have a far away look in my eyes reliving the story line. hahaha guess you could say I got deep into the characters.. It is the rainy season here at it really has lived up to it's name these last few days.. Expat is having some of the same wetness where he is.. It did cool things off when the sun is hidden but has killed the Golfing for me until it dries up a bit. This has been an interesting diversion...



posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 06:51 PM
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Hey hey hey!

No killing off the team!

How many units in that bunch of specialized killers would be going rogue about now? None! We can't waste those characters. They're amazing!

ALSO, if they DO go for the big one, I'd suggest saving that till the end of the story, after character development and the adventures unfold.




posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 07:11 PM
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Okay, if everyone's okay with it, I think its about time to do the time skip. Seems like everything is in place to roll onward and start chapter two.

Chapter 2





I'm gonna write up a summary of the week's events, but before I do, does anyone have any thoughts or suggestions? Things their character might have been doing over that week? Which other characters they bonded with the most?



posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 07:12 PM
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a reply to: XxNightAngelusxX

When will Sandra start the briefing, most people are awake or waking up. Early morning is a good time to do something like this. Peoples minds are fuzzy and they can mull it over during breakfast.

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posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 07:16 PM
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originally posted by: pheonix358
a reply to: XxNightAngelusxX

When will Sandra start the briefing, most people are awake or waking up. Early morning is a good time to do something like this. Peoples minds are fuzzy and they can mull it over during breakfast.

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Sounds good. Maybe Sue-Lin can help her out a bit.

Sandra is a hard ass, but she's no good at breaking news to people. I can see Sandra trying to be the subtle one, and Sue-Lin's wolf persona being the frank blunt one.



posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 07:29 PM
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I am writing in character and Sue-Lin does not know Sandra well enough. She thinks she is making mistakes but is not sure. At some point these two have to butt heads or talk it through. Your choice. Sue-Lin would prefer to talk. Perhaps the first thing would be for Sandra to give Sue-Lin the folder to read with a comment like 'I don't know how to break this news', or 'I would like your help breaking this news'

Sandra does not know that Sue-Lin has already read it. Sandra can wake up and realize that she can't lead by herself. She should have listened to her uncle a lot more but she just didn't believe. Now that she does believe she may be remorseful and not being able to reach out to her uncle she reaches out to the only two people who thought like her Uncle and one of those is not in the bunker.

However you want to handle it is fine by me, I will respond to your lead.

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posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 07:32 PM
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Yeh.


Sandra wants to be responsible for everyone, and she succeeds, but she doesn't intend to lead by herself. She's wise enough to know that all the different group members are skilled in different areas, meaning they'd all become leaders depending on whatever situation is going on.

Sandra's having a strange dream right now, but when she wakes up, she'll break the news to everyone, then I'll work on the transition to chapter two.




posted on Jun, 7 2014 @ 07:43 PM
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OK, Great. I will be around for the next 12 hours or so. I am making repairs to the house I am moving into. This is a good break now and again from that. I hate plaster board! Lol

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