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posted on May, 14 2014 @ 03:06 PM
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The Lake

Up in the hills, Icy water still blue
I feel i have unfinished business with you

Not like before, As a small boy
Sat there with dad. Those memories bring joy
What i would do to be there again
No fear at all, With you i stood tall

Sitting on your banking, Watched the sun set
A most beautiful place, We cant go home yet

But times they do change over the years
What once was your beauty, Is now my worst fears

I find myself looking at your cold icy stare
Your calling me in. And i don't really care

Your cold icy depths could be my retreat
From this sick world that's full of deceit

What is there left from one who is none?
Footpedal down through the fence and im gone

Over the edge and into your lap
Where i am going im not coming back

Carry me down to the bottom of your core
Never to bother no one no more




posted on May, 14 2014 @ 03:17 PM
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a reply to: TheDoctor46

Raw and beautiful, Doctor.

Loved it.



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 03:22 PM
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a reply to: Jennyfrenzy

Thanks as always jenny



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 03:54 PM
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a reply to: TheDoctor46
Very nice doc.

Def raw like Jenny said. I've said it before and I'll say it again.. Raw poetry is the best.



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 03:56 PM
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a reply to: natalia

Thanks for dropping by friend



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 04:13 PM
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a reply to: TheDoctor46

I like it! It's a very beautiful poem.



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 04:23 PM
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a reply to: brazenalderpadrescorpio

Thanks for dropping by. Im glad you like it. Much appreciated



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 04:41 PM
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a reply to: TheDoctor46

I hear you Doc. It seems as we get older that places in nature seem to lose some of their magic when we look at them through the cloudy lenses of this world's reality. Some times I have to cast those glasses to the ground and look until I see clearly again. Peace to you my friend!



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 04:48 PM
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a reply to: grayeagle

Hi greyeagle. Im always happy to hear from you. Your right as always. Those glasses tinted with sadness will be thrown in the lake. Just like they have to be. Thank you for dropping in..Take care



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 04:53 PM
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a reply to: TheDoctor46

Hell NO! You can't go!
That was sad.
But I've got my arms wrapped around your ankle, so you're not going anywhere!

The poetry was beautiful...but it was...sad.
Maybe because it was coming from you?
I have to hug you now....*hug*....

jacygirl



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 05:03 PM
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a reply to: jacygirl

Jacy. That hug was lovely
. And yes it was coming from me. I have been down to the bottom of that lake before in my mind. But i know better now. And besides...Its freeeeeeezinnnnnnng
...Thanks for being here



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 05:23 PM
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a reply to: TheDoctor46

Hunny, I skate on the thin ice surrounding that lake....constantly!

But I can't write when I'm down...it just doesn't come out write...right....lol.
I seem to need to be 'mildly amused' to write anything, especially poetry.

Your poem WAS beautiful...if it was written by a stranger instead of a friend...I likely still would have *hugged* them. I know what it's like to be that down, so I hate it when anybody else is.

You have peeps here!

jacy



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 05:33 PM
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a reply to: jacygirl

Thank you for your nice words Jacy. You always make me smile with your kindness and humour. Dont be falling in that lake now while you skate round it. You wont want to see me in a god damned pair of swimming trunks to pull you out...Urrrrgggg



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 05:49 PM
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a reply to: TheDoctor46

LOL
For some reason, I just thought of the song by Canadian band Blue Rodeo, "Lost Together".
To prevent thread drift here, lol...I just posted it in The Shed.

Some people are able to write 'bittersweet' so well.
Give it a listen if you've never heard it....(umm...from a 'writer's perspective, that is...)

jacy



posted on May, 14 2014 @ 07:24 PM
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Well done!!!!



posted on May, 15 2014 @ 08:04 AM
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a reply to: Night Star

Thank you kind lady



posted on May, 15 2014 @ 08:08 AM
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a reply to: TheDoctor46

That's pretty honest, and better in print than stuck in your head.
It gives me a shiver reading it though. I'm hoping there's a lot of poetry there and no intent?



posted on May, 15 2014 @ 08:16 AM
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a reply to: beansidhe

Hi there beansidhe. I will be honest. At one time it was on my mind. I have had some serious bad times in the last few years. But there's no intent there at all. Besides i think that ford fiesta of mine would not make it through the fence lol. Im going nowhere
..Thanks for jumping in with me



posted on May, 15 2014 @ 08:27 AM
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a reply to: TheDoctor46

Anytime, Doc, guess it maybe wasn't too unfamiliar to recognise, eh?
Just for the record, I had a Renault like that - I had to give up on it when the front axle snapped on the M8. How we laughed...!
But all is good now, and I'm hoping for you too x



posted on May, 15 2014 @ 01:31 PM
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a reply to: TheDoctor46

S & F

Sometimes pain is the beginning of creating beautiful artistry such as your pouring of heart onto paper.

It helps. Don't be sad, you are cared about more than you know.







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