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posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 04:40 PM
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So,
What if it's to late by then,
What if it's no longer if but when,
What if when it happens,
I no longer care,
What if all I have by then,
Is a cold and empty stare?




posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 04:52 PM
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a reply to: TrueBrit

That's a pretty good poem. Nothing less from a writer.



posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 04:54 PM
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originally posted by: TrueBrit
So,
What if it's to late by then,
What if it's no longer if but when,
What if when it happens,
I no longer care,
What if all I have by then,
Is a cold and empty stare?


Then make it happen today........

Great litle poem!



posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 04:56 PM
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a reply to: brazenalderpadrescorpio

Thanks very much!



posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 04:59 PM
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a reply to: TrueBrit

I like it TrueBrit. Short and to the point



posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 05:04 PM
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a reply to: Agartha

Exactly the point of the poem!


Thank you!



posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 05:06 PM
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a reply to: TheDoctor46

Glad you liked it Doc!

Thanks for stopping buy!



posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 05:17 PM
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Thought provoking, TrueBrit. You know I'm a fan of your poetry. However, I must insist, no cold, empty stare from you; you deserve better and frankly, I don't think I could stand to read those dead-visioned poems.

So, get on with it, man...
You know I'm in your corner!



- AB



posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 05:27 PM
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a reply to: AboveBoard

Thats why I wrote the poem AB.

Its like a little reminder to be pro-active. Not just a reminder to me now either, but anyone who reads the thing!



posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 11:27 PM
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a reply to: TrueBrit

Straight to the point and definitely relatable.




posted on Apr, 23 2014 @ 03:12 AM
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Bravo Sir, Bravo!



posted on Apr, 23 2014 @ 04:34 AM
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a reply to: Night Star

Cheers Night Star!



posted on Apr, 23 2014 @ 05:05 AM
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works for me ..great poem....and BTW looking at your avatar you clearly have a drinking problem



posted on Apr, 23 2014 @ 05:08 AM
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a reply to: hopenotfeariswhatweneed

How can I have a drinking problem? My avatar has been nursing that same glass of rum and coke since valentines day!


Thanks for stopping in and commenting!



posted on Apr, 23 2014 @ 05:44 AM
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a reply to: TrueBrit

Hiya hunny!
Your poem sounds like the end of my last marriage.
I hope no one EVER pushes you to the point of apathy.
That 'cold and empty stare' usually has a lot of pain behind it.
My wish for you is a life of love and happiness...and a future poem whereby the last line denotes a 'warm and happy grin'.

S&F&hug
jacy



posted on Apr, 23 2014 @ 10:37 AM
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a reply to: TrueBrit

Truebro - You know how moved I always am by your posts.


This time, I felt - not just moved - but Inspired!!

Inspired to compose my own verse in your honour sir!

UNDERGARMENTS
So,
What if it's too late by then,
to make it to the loo in time,
What if when it happens,
I no longer care,
What if all I have by then,
Is a cold, wet, empty pair?


I thank you! (For the Inspiration!) LOL
Big G



posted on Apr, 23 2014 @ 10:40 AM
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a reply to: Gordi The Drummer

You sir, are a legend!

LOL!




posted on Apr, 23 2014 @ 10:42 AM
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a reply to: jacygirl

Hey jacygirl!

This is one of the ways I prevent myself getting to that point, by getting it out on paper metaphysically speaking. Its either that or thousands of computer sprites will die. Hell, they might die anyway, but I like writing



posted on Aug, 4 2014 @ 06:33 PM
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a reply to: TrueBrit

I find it terribly coincidental that I chose to read this out of anything on your list to read.

How 7 lines can have such an impact is just astounding. I feel as if I could have written this myself as the lines seem to come straight from my own thoughts. But I believe anyone could relate to this poem and therein lies your success in writing it:-)





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